Synthesis Exercise Using Sarah Carter’s Lost Harvests and George Manuel and Michael Poslun’s The Fourth World.

This is all the feedback from the teacher. please depend on it edit this essay.Hello Zhen. Sorry to hear that you were ill. Good effort here. You wrote: Hawkes once claimed that Indigenous peoples had no aptitude for farming and no desire to farm. Sarah Carter also states that “[t]he Indian was not a natural farmer” (3). TRY THIS: In 1924, historian John Hawkes claimed that Indigenous peoples had no aptitude for farming and no desire to farm because “'[t]he Indian was not a natural farmer’” (qtd. in Carter 3). NOTE: 3 marks around exact words. VAGUE: WHAT TENDS TO CONVEY? It tends to convey that SENTENCE FRAGMENT: According to George Manuel and Michael Posluns, “the fruit of a thousand generations’ cultivation…by Indian people” (6). NOT LOGICAL. WHAT IS “IT”? It mainly means that Indian people I INVITE YOU TO REVISE AGAIN. ADD A QUOTE FROM MANUEL AND POSLUNS THAT LISTS THE CROPS AND CITE THE PAGE. WELL FORMATTED WORKS CITED ENTRIES. CHEERS, SHIRLEY Shirley McDonald, Jun 19 at 4:54pm HELLO ZHEN. Oops. You missed this comment: WHAT IS “it”? It tends to convey that Indian people failed … List the number of crops. Not like this: hey have created a large number of precious crops… USE A Quote to list the crops. i.e. beans, cranberries etc. HERE TOO. “It” MEANS WHAT? THE AUTHORS? THE TEXT? YOU WROTE: It mainly means that Indian people should be entitled to claim the land they have first developed in North America, …. MISUNDERSTANDING. INDIGENOUS PEOPLES DID NOT CLAIM THE LAND. THEY EVOLVED HERE FOR THOUSANDS OF YEARS. I INVITE YOU TO REVISE AGAIN. CHEERS, SHIRLEY Shirley McDonald, Jun 20 at 2:15pm Good effort Zhen. If the myth that Hawkes promotes is that Indigenous peoples were not competent farmers, it makes sense to provide information from Manuel and Posluns’s text to demonstrate that such a misrepresentation is false by quoting the many crops that Indigenous farmers developed and grew. What are the crops? What changes to settlers’ diets did the foodstuffs have? What did they eat before arriving in North America? Cheers, Shirley Shirley McDonald, Jun 22 at 3:37pm P.S. the location of Hawkes’s book is special collections or archives. It is too old to circulate. Shirley McDonald, Jun 22 at 3:38pm p.p.s. The title should be italicized and not the name of the publisher. Shirley McDonald, Jun 22 at 3:38pm Hello Zhen. Sorry. Good effort but you have not managed to fix the problems. THIS QUOTE IS NOT USEFUL: According to George Manuel and Michael Posluns, “'[t]he Indians are entitled to declare a victory” (4). THERE is no logical connection to Hawkes’s claim. __The Fourth World__ is a book title and should be italicized. PUT THE AUTHORS’ names IN the sentences like this: According to George Manuel and Michael Posluns, “'[t]he Indians are entitled to declare a victory” (4). Refer to them by last names in subsequent sentences. Manuel and Posluns assert that at the time of first contact, Indigenous peoples had developed “six hundred …. “